Anthony was too excited to sleep. At midnight he heard the cook’s drunken voice raised in song behind the inn and later a rooster crowing; he saw the first grey light of dawn streak bits of sky through the narrow window. He sprang up from his mattress before anyone else was awake and hurried, shivering in the early chill, to the wash basin outside the back door … He put on his clothes in the dark. His loose surcoat had blue and tawny stripes.
(My mentor Howard Pease continues with an exercise) Now underline with your two colored pencils: blue for any of the senses used, red for the color words.
Next, let me say that here is an author who makes use of color words as well as the five senses, and usually he uses both with exactness. This paragraph, however, happens to contain a flaw, a statement about color, that mars the flow of the narrative. Can you spot it? Pause for a moment until you find it.
Here’s the flaw: If our protagonist is putting on his surcoat in the dark, he cannot see its colors, and neither can we. A small inaccuracy, yes. Still, it is a tiny hurdle which an alert reader might stumble over. Therefore, when you present any of the five senses in your writing, take care that your statement is physiologically possible.